Firstly, sorry for the voice over... I was experimenting. Though it helps the narrative in terms of understanding, it also doesn't quite fit.
Though we agreed that the first two scenes with my younger brothers are up to our standards, we didn't like the other two scenes and have decided to re-shoot them.
Why didn't they work? Personally, I think it's the lack of interesting and thought-out camera angles. The angles used aren't particularly exciting and also the match-on-action doesn't match up for some of the shots. Especially for the last scene, we rushed it and consistently looked at our scripts. It was also filmed in a location that doesnt look very realistic for a therapists office and looks more like a drama stuido which drama kids use. This again made it look rushed and untidy. This was hard for me to edit around and evidently made the film look very untidy.
The last scene also has a completely different feel to the rest of the movie. It's quite off putting, as the complete change in tempo is so sudden, and not in a good way. I think when we re-film it, we should change the 3rd scene slightly. Make it brighter and perhaps even change the story because with the rewrite of the ending we need to change some things. For example, it doesn't make sense that he would make his own girlfriend leave him. Unless of course it's justified, in which case we would need to also explain that in the next scene.
Speaking of the girlfriend, she shouldn't leave him through skype. It doesn't look good on camera, and is far to unemotional. We also made it unclear with the actual dialogue that it was a break-up, hence why I did the voice over. Having the sense redone will help created some emotion which may help the story be told better. Also having his girlfriend dump him needs to come across more serious than a realtionship that may have happned if they were 13. This would show how much its chnaging and taking over his life.
-BW (edited by RM)
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